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October 19, 2008


Count me in, sweetheart!

hot dammity damn!

[she] rises with her [raven] hair...

welcome back state-here-side, jillie.
the lone star missed you bucketfulls

Bienvenue aux etats-unis ou liberation rules, mein liebchen.
So generous of you to offer line edits. Here's one that's been bugging me. It comes at the end of the eighth stanza of a nine-stanza poem, and it arrives as a rhetorical climax:
"We must love one another or die."
It sounds good, I know, but it's untrue -- we're going to die no matter what -- and I have this old-fashioned notion that poetry and truth should go together like wahrheit und dichtung or conjugal love and Alberto Moravia.
What should I do? Junk the stanza? Junk the poem? Can you think of a way to save the line? Like maybe changing "or" to "and"?
For your muse-inspired vice and advice I thank you in advance of the guard.
Ton ami
PS How about "the conscious acceptance of guilt in the necessary murder"? That's another line I'm not quite satisfied with.

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